xcandidx: I am in the process of working on chapte

xcandidx (

xcandidx) wrote,
@ 2008-05-12 21:04:00

Current mood:	amused
Current music:	Running Up That HIll - Within Temptation

I am in the process of working on chapter 7 of HS(I). There will be new scenes in this version, as I have mentioned before, and this is where the changes will start to become clear. I have added a new challenge a la scavenger hunt-- except this particular scavenger hunt carries a particularly sinister message that foreshadows the impending violence and doom. YAY! VIOLENCE!! DOOOOOM!!!

I'm curious. After sixteen (deleted) chapters and a sequel, how do you guys see GM? (Please feel free to include pictures, diagrams, and bar graphs along with your written explanation). ;D

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amusexbouche
2008-05-13 08:28 am UTC (link)

WARNING: THIS IS GOING TO BE VERY, VERY LONG AND TEDIOUS. (EDIT: ACTUALLY, TO BE EXACT, IT WAS SO LONG THAT IT EXCEEDED LJ'S WORD LIMIT AND SO I'M GOING TO HAVE TO POST THIS IN TWO PARTS. EDITII (not nearly as exciting as HSII. AT ALL.): SORRY REPOST, MY HTML!SKILLZ SCREWED UP SOMETHING AWFUL.)

Visual Aid:

Guide:

HSI

1) Like I told you before (in my first review to you!), this was my first horror fic so I WAS LIKE "AGHA;LSKDFSDF I AM SCARED" when I first started out. And when GM was "introduced" in the beginning with the flowers and all I was all "AHG;LK;SF WHO IS THIS (IS HE PRETTY?)???"

2) This is when GM finally appears in the story and where the game begins. AND WHERE HE KILLS THAT GIRL (argh forgot her name -- the one that liked him!) WITHOUT ANY EMOTION WHATSOEVER AND KIDNAPPED JAMES AND AGLSDFSDF. My face was indeed "@_________@" and that's when I first started to REALLY feel scared of GM and see just what he could be capable of doing (without feeling guilty!). HA HA HA. *cooes over GM plushie* ANYWAY.

3) SELF-EXPLANATORY. OMFG. (B-by the way, the green eyes with hearts in them are green because I WAS FEELING JEALOUS ~~A BIT~~ AAH.)

4) THE ENDING. TOTALLY. TOOK. ME. BY. SURPRISE. I remember that my heart went "AGHLSFBWAH?" and I was thinking "AGHSDF WHAT NOO WHAAT." Yes. It was a very dramatic time for me. At that time I was thinking of GM as "Holy cow, he loves her and then he lets her fall into the pool. WHAT DOES THAT MEAN FOR THE REST OF US?! *cowers in boots*" My mind was stunned at GM's ability to follow any whim he desired, no matter the cost of "human morals" (aka GUILT OR SECOND-THOUGHTS) or the people around him. I think it was reading what he did to Val in the end when that realization really sunk into me. I'm one of those people who has a really big conscience so when reading about GM and and all the things he did without even batting an eyelash, I was like "AG;HSLKJFDASLF WOW."

HSII (Note: after I finished HSI, I was sitting there, still reeling in shock at HOW MUCH I LOVED IT, and thinking something along the lines of "HOLY CRAP" which progressed to "HOLY CRAAAAAAP" which finally ended at "HOLY CRAP I LOVE THIS STORY I LOVE GM OMFG MUST GO READ SEQUEL NOW.")

There is no 1., 2., or 3., because IT WAS ALL MY LOVE/FASCINATION FOR GM THE ENTIRE TIME (except CLEARLY IT GOT WORSE AS MORE CHAPTERS GOT POSTED UP). WHICH IS WHERE I AM AT NOW. A MONSTER. A MOOONNSTTERRR. Hee. (A drooling monster, to be exact.) (And those are flames in my eyes on the last picture, and the sparks coming out of it are actually hearts. YES. IT IS THAT BAD.)

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amusexbouche
2008-05-13 08:29 am UTC (link)

(continued!)

Conclusion of how I see GM:

Realistic: I see him as someone that, if I was in Val's position, would scare the CRAP out of me. I'm serious. Waaaaah. I balk just thinking about it. I'm one of those people who imagine themselves in the main character's shoes whenever I happen read something and how I would react and MY REACTION TO GM WOULD NOT BE VERY PRETTY (or snot/tissue-free, for that matter). I would probably spend most of my time during the GM!games hiding and sobbing and begging and being EXTREMELY paranoid and thinking of all the ways I could possibly die (and then crying some more). And then GM would get disgusted with me and KILL ME OFF. Aaaaaaaaaaaah. x Ax

In my mind: I seem to have a VERY UNHEALTHY attraction to scary, murderous, diabolical, apathetic (especially when it comes to killing) YET UNNERVINGLY BEAUTIFUL guys. If NOTHING BAD COULD HAPPEN TO ME I would very, VERY much like to stalk GM. Serious. And I would like to dance circles around him singing annoying songs about my love for him. And I would write haikus and post them wherever he goes and stare unblinkingly at him whenever he is in range of me. Squeak. (So bascially, in a nutshell, I WOULD LIKE TO GM GM (in my own, twisted way). (I-if you know what I mean MWA HA HA HA HA HA HAAA!!))

Overall: GM is one of those people that I stare/listen in fascinated horror (and horrified fascination) whenever I read/hear about them. GM seriously THRILLS me everytime I read about him talking/moving/STANDING STILL/just BEING THERE. My pupils are always dilated when I read HS/HSII. I see GM as someone who will never stop until he gets what he wants. But that's what propels me to liking him more, SOMEHOW. Polar attraction, I suppose? (THOUGH MY LOVE WILL ALWAYS BE UNREQUITED) So basically I see GM as someone that I admire (because of his apathy and calmness towards ALL SITUATIONS. SOMETIMES I WISH I HAD HIS WAY OF LOOKING AT THINGS INSTEAD OF BEING ALL EMOTIONALWAGHASLDKFF), and overall, as someone I will always want/watch from the shadows/fascinate about but NEVER CAN HAVE.
(And I would like to sic GM on my enemies. NYA HA HA HA HA HA.)

... UM. ALL THIS WRITTEN AND DONE, I HAVE SUDDENLY HAD A HORRIBLE REALIZATION THAT MAYBE WHAT I WROTE WASN'T WHAT YOU WERE ASKING FOR. (I-I suddenly have a vision of you going "... wtf is all this.")

SORRREEEEEEEEE. D:

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xcandidx
2008-05-14 01:05 am UTC (link)

That drawing was absolutely adorable. C:

AHG;LK;SF WHO IS THIS (IS HE PRETTY?)???

That's exactly how I am, EVERY time I read a horror story.

Holy cow, he loves her and then he lets her fall into the pool. WHAT DOES THAT MEAN FOR THE REST OF US?!

Actually, that was a continuity error on my part. That scene is going to be changed in the rough draft. I'm probably going to have her attempt to kill him or something and then GM will be, "OH NO YOU DIDN'T!" *pushes in pool*

OMG. Somebody compared GM to Jigsaw. I was like O___O;;

GM is one of those people that I stare/listen in fascinated horror (and horrified fascination) whenever I read/hear about them. GM seriously THRILLS me everytime I read about him talking/moving/STANDING STILL/just BEING THERE.

Oh dear. Well, I might have a very mild sex scene in the next chapter so you better make sure you bring your drool buckets!! C:

I HAVE SUDDENLY HAD A HORRIBLE REALIZATION THAT MAYBE WHAT I WROTE WASN'T WHAT YOU WERE ASKING FOR

Actually it was very entertaining to read. I always like feedback, unless it's the mean "Your story is just like XYZ!! Maybe you should go read XYZ!!" type feedback, in which they can go to a lovely place that I call Hell. C: I was referring to physical attributes, but you took it a step further and that is amazing.

And YES. I LOVE TWILIGHT. A lot of the people on Fictionpress have some sort of stigma against it, and I have to admit Bella is kind of annoying bordering on Mary Sue, but EDWARD is... Wow. I am SO SO excited for breaking dawn because it comes out four days before my birthday and it is called an "adult novel" which leads me to believe it has sex which means (hopefully) at least several pages' worth of descriptions of what Edward Cullen looks like nekkid. ;D

...I'm so bad.

I'm amazed about how you can keep all those parenthesis straight. Me, I would get SO CONFUSED.

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amusexbouche
2008-05-14 02:43 am UTC (link)

FANK YOUUU! :D It came out better than I hoped! (Maybe it was because of the fact that I kept erasing and starting over again 239840234 times. DARN YOU CIRCLES.)

AASDFKLFAHAHAHAHAHA I LAUGHED SO HARD AT GM'S "OH NO YOU DIDN'T." (S-somehow I can imagine him saying that in a twisted version of HS. LIKE A PARODY! But that's only because I have a very wonky mind.)

To be absolutely honest, I didn't know who Jigzaw was (I NEED TO GET IN WITH THE PROGRAM), so I went to go look him up! WIKIPEDIA, FTW. Reading it, I can see what the reviewer meant -- like with the games and all that goodiness, but WOW. I HOPE TO DEAR GOODNESS THAT GM DOES NOT LOOK LIKE THAT. o Ao||||
C-creepy. *shallow*

AND OH. EM. EFFING. GEE. OHHHHHHHHMYGOSH. OGHLAF. WHEN I READ THAT SENTENCE(S) OF YOURS I SERIOUSLY HAD TO RUN (read: dance, holler, squeal, shriek) LAPS AROUND MY ROOM WITH MY ARMS FLAILING BEHIND ME. I am seriously not joking. THIS IS BAD FOR MY HEART. BAD BUT SOOOO GOOOOOOOOOD~ Agh;alsdflsfffffffffffff. *bites fist* GUH. EVEN THINKING AGAIN ABOUT IT NOW MAKES ME WANT TO SHRIEK. (actually I just did. AHHH.)

AND WHEW! Yay! ~~Some~~Alotofthetimes I'll be writing something and then I look back at the topic and be like "WHAT. UM. UH-OH AM I DOING THIS CORRECTLY? *panics and then spends 2934234 hours staring and thinking*" Ooh, physical attributes? WHOOPS. Wait, is that the same as physical description?? (OMFG NOW I TRULY KNOW THAT MUCH OF MY BRAIN CELLS ARE MISSING.) As in an actor? Because - because in my mind, I don't know exactly what GM looks like -- it's as though his face is a sort of blur. But I do know that he has black hair and grey eyes and a lanky, tall body (GUHGUHGUH) because of the descriptions you wrote! But I don't know exactly what he looks like; like if someone made me choose an actor I'd be like "UM. WELL. I-IDK. *quails*" It's just like that with Edward, too. ALL I KNOW IS THAT THEY'RE HOT AND SEXY AND THAT I WOULD DO THEM IN A HEARTBEAT. Ahem. Yes. (I have a theory that it's because GM and Edward are too sexy and beautiful that my human mind cannot even begin to fathom just how agh;asldkfjsfdsfOMFGHOWYADOIN' they are.)

People on FP.net do? Waaaah! D: But yes, IA with the fact that Bella is a wee bit annoying (AND A WEE BIT TOO LUCKY ARGGH *green*). AND YES, YES, YES, EDWARD IS WOW ITSELF. OY. * 0*
But WHAT?! It's going to be an adult novel?! AGHA;LSDFSF I THINK I MISSED THAT PART. WHAT THE. YES. OMFG. OMFFFGGGGGGGGGG. AAAAAAAAA. I did read somewhere that SM was doing an interview with someone (I think it was Glenn Beck) and then he told her that he admired her for the fact that she didn't put sex into the Twilight seires and then SHE WINCED. AS THOUGH THERE IS GOING TO BE SMEX IN TEH NEXT BOOK. LOLASDFLK YES. (A-and I think BD should devote a whole CHAPTER to how Eddie Cullen looks sans clothing. And then ANOTHER TWO WHOLE chapters of Ed and Bell's ~interaction~ together. OMFG. AFSH. GUH. ♥ *PERV*)

I'M RIGHT THERE WITH YOU IN THAT THOUGHT. RIGHT. THERE. WITH. YOU. (Well not really because that would be rather awkward BUT YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN)

HAHA! DON'T BE! xD (I-I actually have to go over and review to find out just how many parenthesis I have to put in. LOL. *shameful*)

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xcandidx
2008-05-14 03:22 am UTC (link)

I'm glad you're excited. xD I'm about ready to start flailing myself, because this is going to be my first M-rated fic ever. I just know I'm gonna be all, AMMIDOINITRITE? Haha. It's nice to know that I have one loyal supporter. Hopefully you won't hate me afterwards. LOL. D:

I think it's good that she didn't have sex in the first BOOK. As I was reading it I kept thinking, if this was an FP story they would have been getting it on already... Seriously. What is with that? And it's always OOH THIS IS MY FIRST TIME, TOO BUT SOMEHOW I KNOW WHERE TO PUT EVERYTHING.

And, THIS WAS THE BEST LOVIN' EVAR. LET'S GO DO IT AGAIN, K THX?

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	xcandidx 2008-05-14 03:38 am UTC (link)
	GOSH DARN IT!!! It wouldn't let me post the link. Well, anyway. I found a hot guy that looks like GM. Except this guy's a bit too muscular. (Not that I'm complaining...) Tee-hee. (Reply to this)(Parent)(Thread)

amusexbouche
2008-05-14 04:20 am UTC (link)

H-HOLY CRAP. O ___________O

UM. I CAN'T. WOW. I CAN'T EVEN TYPE PROPERLY BECAUSE I CAN'T STOP. STARING. AND THIS COMMENT BOX MAKES ME HAVE TO SCROLL DOWN A BIT SO I'M JUST KINDA STARING AT HIS CHEST. AGHAS;LGASDFLKJFFF. HOLY. OTL. (A-AND SOMEHOW HE LOOKS SO FAMILIAR BUT I CAN'T SEEM TO REMEMBER WHERE I SAW HIM BEFORE. WHO CARES. HE'S HOT. I'M NOT. WHATEVER. IT ALL WORKS OUT. SEXXXYYYYYYY~ * 0* (A-and I would kindasortaPLEASE like him to be looking at me like that. GAH. PHWOAR!! *fans self quickly*))

And HECK YES, I'M EXCITED! I clap my hands in glee just thinking about it MWAHAHAHAHA. IT'S IN THE NEXT CHAPTER, RIGHT?? AFDDF FDSDFDFSDSF. And heck no, I'M POSITIVE IT'S GOING TO BE AWESOME. *slur*

IAWYC. I think it's better that you know, the first books are about getting to know each other, DRAMAZ, and all that etc., and then they progress there. I like those kind of stories A LOT better than just "HI I'M A SEX-CRAZED MANIAC AND I BET YOU'RE ONE TOO LET'S GOOO!"

AND LOLROFLAGAHAHA. I ALWAYS WONDERED ABOUT THE SEX THING TOO! It's like ~MAGICALLY~ they know EXACTLY how to do everything and do it LIKE A MANIAC WHO'S HAD 239423 YEARS OF EXPERIENCE. (Oh yeah, and the multiple rounds "LET'S DO IT AGAIN! NAO!" Gahahaha *snicker*)

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	xcandidx 2008-05-14 05:21 pm UTC (link)
	His name is Victor Webster. Apparently he's been in lots of TV shows and soap operas. I found the pictures here: http://cisoto.blogspot.com/2007/09/victor-webster-hq.html SQUEAL (Reply to this)(Parent)

randomlaughter
2008-05-15 10:42 pm UTC (link)

This may seem really random, but I'm SamanthaNicole from FP, and reviewed Horrorscape maybe a week ago. First of all, again, can I just say how much I LOVED it?

And I was randomly searching for pictures for my own characters last night, and came across this one, which made me think of GM.

Just thought I'd share with you!

Also, I hope you don't mind if I add you to my friends list.

Cheers,
Sammy

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	xcandidx 2008-05-15 11:13 pm UTC (link)
	He. Is. Fine. :D kidnaps him I'm glad you like the story! It sure made my day to see all those sweet reviews in my inbox. And you go right ahead and add me. In fact, I'm going to take it a step further and add you back. Mwahaha~ (Reply to this)(Parent)(Thread)

s a m a n t h a: Bones [Crossing the street]

randomlaughter
2008-05-15 11:52 pm UTC (link)

Liked it? No. 'Like' doesn't even begin to cover how I feel about that story. I love supernatural pieces, but I'd never actually read a horror piece until yours, and I was blown away. Others that I tried to read were horrible and cliche, so I'd give up after a few paragraphs or so. I love what you've come up with. I only wish I'd stumbled upon it sooner so I could've read the original, so I could be reading the sequel (since I clearly can't cheat and skip ahead, haha). So, instead, I'm eagerly awaiting your next update.

Also, yes! He IS fine. His name's Hrithik Roshan, a Bollywood film star. If you wanted to see more of hime.

And thanks! I love new friends, haha <3

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	So I know I'm ridiculously late with this but... (Anonymous) 2008-06-23 09:20 pm UTC (link)
	http://i113.photobucket.com/albums/n232/camy_lavy/TomSturridge061706.jpg It's not really a fantastic picture of him, as there aren't many, but he was always what I envisioned. Also, if you ever have nothing to do, watch the movie Like Minds, he's in it, plus it's a rather interesting film. take care! (Reply to this)(Thread)

	Re: So I know I'm ridiculously late with this but... xcandidx 2008-06-24 05:21 pm UTC (link)
	Ooh. He's cute. I'll definitely have to check out that film. (Reply to this)(Parent)

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